09-04-2016, 04:56 AM
One thing I am going to clarify before I go further. If you work in R&D you will be expected to work on group projects. Not by yourself. So your character needs to be a team player. Especially when you’re first starting out. Don’t do the equivalent of choosing underwater basket weaving over engineering. Going into a field where you are actually going to be useful/helpful to the inherent goals of R&D is going to get you much further. Remember that the lair is investing in your character and expects a return on that investment. How do you plan to return that investment?
With the idiopathic neuropathy he would probably get automatically disqualified from a lot of R&D simply because a sense of pain can save lives in there, so if he burns himself, bleeds into an experiment, or generally injured himself without knowing it due to the work he is actually more of a liability than anything else. You might want to consider removing this.
As for archeology, the lair and the minions need to focus on projects that benefit society in the present and future (not to mention that since the islands are all an artificial creation of a mad mage, there isn't really that much in the way of archeological sites compared to the rest of the world). Fox probably does fund certain ventures into dig sites and things like that, but none of them are located in the lair proper. So an archeologist would not find much work in the lair. As such you would be largely RPing by yourself, which is not the point of a public group RP.
Regarding your backstory, it just seems like a big hot mess of tragedy. Mother dead, girlfriend dead, insane rival incarcerated, blind daughter to take care of. It honestly sounds like this is a character you have your own stories written up for and shoehorned into the ‘Aukate’ universe.
I don’t see a lot of regard in place for the world itself. Barely any mention of anything related to it, and no questions/requests for help in developing how your character would fit in this story. We have stated in our character guides we don’t want to see orphans, It’s a very over-used trope. Your character still counts as such.
There’s nothing here that explains why he wants to join the minions. What he wants to do for Fox and the lair. How is he going to take care of a handicapped child while he’s away for weeks? You can get child care at the lair but not instantly and not in the week you spend in boot camp and the few weeks in the lair getting orientation. Having a character with a child is difficult enough, especially as a single parent, having one that’s handicapped is going a little far. We had a character that had an NPC attached to them once before and it ended up being troublesome.
With the idiopathic neuropathy he would probably get automatically disqualified from a lot of R&D simply because a sense of pain can save lives in there, so if he burns himself, bleeds into an experiment, or generally injured himself without knowing it due to the work he is actually more of a liability than anything else. You might want to consider removing this.
As for archeology, the lair and the minions need to focus on projects that benefit society in the present and future (not to mention that since the islands are all an artificial creation of a mad mage, there isn't really that much in the way of archeological sites compared to the rest of the world). Fox probably does fund certain ventures into dig sites and things like that, but none of them are located in the lair proper. So an archeologist would not find much work in the lair. As such you would be largely RPing by yourself, which is not the point of a public group RP.
Regarding your backstory, it just seems like a big hot mess of tragedy. Mother dead, girlfriend dead, insane rival incarcerated, blind daughter to take care of. It honestly sounds like this is a character you have your own stories written up for and shoehorned into the ‘Aukate’ universe.
I don’t see a lot of regard in place for the world itself. Barely any mention of anything related to it, and no questions/requests for help in developing how your character would fit in this story. We have stated in our character guides we don’t want to see orphans, It’s a very over-used trope. Your character still counts as such.
There’s nothing here that explains why he wants to join the minions. What he wants to do for Fox and the lair. How is he going to take care of a handicapped child while he’s away for weeks? You can get child care at the lair but not instantly and not in the week you spend in boot camp and the few weeks in the lair getting orientation. Having a character with a child is difficult enough, especially as a single parent, having one that’s handicapped is going a little far. We had a character that had an NPC attached to them once before and it ended up being troublesome.