Oh, I don't know: that depends entirely on how you intend to play him. After all, your character will live, life is unpredictable, and you have to show to the world how he lives the events. As such, it rests more on you as a player to make your character alive and multifaceted, than on what you have written in your profile. You will be forced to adapt and develop anyway, unless you just want to play alone. And for example, deciding to serve the Overlord is already a big step in a character's life.
Ask yourself what you want him to be. Just try to avoid the (quoting Gen and Foxena) "Tragically born a PC" label, it leads dangerously towards the path of the mary-sue, and the Dark Side of RP.
The only thing I'm feeling to point out is that he has a wife and three children, but he decided to come to Aukate: why, what about the family, what he and them think about all this, ecc... That's a big part of him, and it's something that should be more developed.
Ask yourself what you want him to be. Just try to avoid the (quoting Gen and Foxena) "Tragically born a PC" label, it leads dangerously towards the path of the mary-sue, and the Dark Side of RP.
The only thing I'm feeling to point out is that he has a wife and three children, but he decided to come to Aukate: why, what about the family, what he and them think about all this, ecc... That's a big part of him, and it's something that should be more developed.